Saturday, May 12, 2007

Second Chance

Oh dear, . . . after posting this, Marion my best critic, says the poem makes no sense. I am going to have another go. I often go back in and tweak poems after first posting them, which is part of the intended use of the blog, but this one needs a major overhaul.

(I need a second chance.) :-)

The billowing stars with beards alight
emit a moment's splurge in flight
to tuck and twist a human code
a second’s chance
in quantum corridors of script
discrete, this tiny tick of time with
seventy times seven
second chances
to forgive and be forgiven.


Crafty Green Poet said...

Does a poem need to really make sense though? I enjoyed your poem and the fact that may not make sense in the most obvious way only means I read it again and it starts to mean various things.

Inconsequential said...

a lot of sins forgiven...


ish said...

Thanks inc. I will accept your absolution as far a verseification goes. :-)

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